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Bewildered by your silence
It sucks you don't care
Sitting I fester
And play with my hair
At first I stew
And become belligerent with anger
Then sadness overcomes.
The person I thought I knew
Is a stranger.
I get mad when I realize
I jumped in head first
That I didn't sip
But Chugged
Just to quench my thirst
What is wrong?
Why do I still crave this being?
Your eyes so distant now
They are fading
No way am I that cold
And could detach that quick
To let this build up the way it has,
makes me sick
I try
I've tried hard to fight, you see
Alas, I can't and wont fight Love.
That's not me
It sucks you don't care
Sitting I fester
And play with my hair
At first I stew
And become belligerent with anger
Then sadness overcomes.
The person I thought I knew
Is a stranger.
I get mad when I realize
I jumped in head first
That I didn't sip
But Chugged
Just to quench my thirst
What is wrong?
Why do I still crave this being?
Your eyes so distant now
They are fading
No way am I that cold
And could detach that quick
To let this build up the way it has,
makes me sick
I try
I've tried hard to fight, you see
Alas, I can't and wont fight Love.
That's not me
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Hello, I am from #BuildingBetterPoets c:
I reeeaally love the message your poem carries and I especially love the way you word everything. I feel like you really thought about how your words flowed with each other, and that's something that a lot of poets skip over. Congrats c:
However, the tempo of your poem confused me. The lines and the syllables left me making my own tempo, which wasn't that graceful. Your words flow with wonders, but if you can get all the lines to flow from the beginning to the end, you would blow minds.
I reeeaally love the message your poem carries and I especially love the way you word everything. I feel like you really thought about how your words flowed with each other, and that's something that a lot of poets skip over. Congrats c:
However, the tempo of your poem confused me. The lines and the syllables left me making my own tempo, which wasn't that graceful. Your words flow with wonders, but if you can get all the lines to flow from the beginning to the end, you would blow minds.